Earl: Do as I say or I'll BLOW UP THE MASCARA SHOP. Jasdevi: D:
(Sleep deprivation was definitely part of Miranda's look, but the black seemed too thick to be that alone. I don't know. She certainly has less black nowadays. In Bak's case, I bet he's pretty stressed out from nerves and overwork. XD)
The Earl is creepy. Creepy and inhuman, as opposed to the creepy-but-human Noahs. It works well since he's the main villain. I don't like that he had a more "human" form in a recent chapter, since I think it would be cooler if he were always one step removed from humanity and unable to get any closer. I like that the Earl actually appears to care about the Noahs, though--it overturns the boss villain "You've failed, now I'm going to kill you" cliche. He's sure to be up to something, though. Well, obviously he's plotting the end of the world and a dozen other things, but in addition to that he could be manipulating the Noahs as well.
Yeah, Tiki's quite the personable, everyday guy in his hobo "normal" form. Then he goes and rips out people's internal organs and hangs them from lampposts. As a Noah fan, I really hope he'd choose the Noahs. And because of all the horrible murders he's committed. Noah or not, nobody forced him to kill people, so the Black Order would have to hold him accountable for crimes against humanity instead of saying "Well, he's good now, so that doesn't count!" STFU Allen "He has friends so he must be an okay person" Walker I guess if he's only Black Order members they could be considered enemy combatants killed during war. But I highly doubt he's only killed Order members, and even so his methodology is kind of, uh... objectionable. Disclaimer: I love Tiki.
*drags out random Shounen Jump issue* When Tiki says "big brother" he's putting an emphasis on it that suggests Sherril/Cyril/etc. isn't really his brother. It looks like the "brother" setup is all part of the fake family Sherril/Cyril and Rhode have going on. I bet Jasdero and Devit (and Skinn, when he was alive) were the uncouth American cousins. When I consider including Sherril in fics I always want to cast him as an antagonist towards the other Noahs, because God, he comes across as SUCH a pervert. FLASHBACKS! But didn't you know that all Americans are blond-haired, blue-eyed bisexuals with firearms? *cries*
I've changed it! Thanks for pointing it out. I need more concrit, so if you ever notice anything else, let me know. <3 I tried NaNoWriMo last year. Didn't get far and the story sucked, but when reading through it afterwards I was like, "Wow, I use a lot of adverbs." The same goes for many fics here. I'm now trying to do something about it.
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Date: 2008-08-19 03:29 pm (UTC)Earl: Do as I say or I'll BLOW UP THE MASCARA SHOP.
Jasdevi: D:
(Sleep deprivation was definitely part of Miranda's look, but the black seemed too thick to be that alone. I don't know. She certainly has less black nowadays. In Bak's case, I bet he's pretty stressed out from nerves and overwork. XD)
The Earl is creepy. Creepy and inhuman, as opposed to the creepy-but-human Noahs. It works well since he's the main villain. I don't like that he had a more "human" form in a recent chapter, since I think it would be cooler if he were always one step removed from humanity and unable to get any closer. I like that the Earl actually appears to care about the Noahs, though--it overturns the boss villain "You've failed, now I'm going to kill you" cliche. He's sure to be up to something, though. Well, obviously he's plotting the end of the world and a dozen other things, but in addition to that he could be manipulating the Noahs as well.
Yeah, Tiki's quite the personable, everyday guy in his
hobo"normal" form. Then he goes and rips out people's internal organs and hangs them from lampposts. As a Noah fan, I really hope he'd choose the Noahs. And because of all the horrible murders he's committed. Noah or not, nobody forced him to kill people, so the Black Order would have to hold him accountable for crimes against humanity instead of saying "Well, he's good now, so that doesn't count!"STFU Allen "He has friends so he must be an okay person" WalkerI guess if he's only Black Order members they could be considered enemy combatants killed during war. But I highly doubt he's only killed Order members, and even so his methodology is kind of, uh... objectionable. Disclaimer: I love Tiki.*drags out random Shounen Jump issue* When Tiki says "big brother" he's putting an emphasis on it that suggests Sherril/Cyril/etc. isn't really his brother. It looks like the "brother" setup is all part of the fake family Sherril/Cyril and Rhode have going on. I bet Jasdero and Devit (and Skinn, when he was alive) were the uncouth American cousins. When I consider including Sherril in fics I always want to cast him as an antagonist towards the other Noahs, because God, he comes across as SUCH a pervert. FLASHBACKS! But didn't you know that all Americans are blond-haired, blue-eyed bisexuals with firearms? *cries*
I've changed it! Thanks for pointing it out. I need more concrit, so if you ever notice anything else, let me know. <3 I tried NaNoWriMo last year. Didn't get far and the story sucked, but when reading through it afterwards I was like, "Wow, I use a lot of adverbs." The same goes for many fics here. I'm now trying to do something about it.